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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi there, here for your requested review!!

This was such a wonderful little tribute to friendship. I loved the characterization of Rose and Scorpius and their light bantering with each other. I think it's completely realistic and fresh that they would be just friends, and I loved how they planned to meet up in a neutral place where they aren't Weasley and Malfoy, but just two friends. It was clear how well they knew each other, like how Rose already knew that Scorpius had checked his results.

One thing I really enjoyed about your writing style was the use of small details to show characteristics of their personalities in their lives. For example, the description of Scorpius' expensive shoes and how he didn't care that they were dirty gave me such a powerful idea of what he was like, and just from his shoes! :P Also, the comparison of what their Christmases were like and the very different family dynamics was really subtle and well done.

I also appreciated how neither of them were perfect students and got a range of marks- it made them more likeable and believable as characters! I loved Rose's character as well, she seems really sassy and open. :)

One thing that confused me a little was why Scorpius thought Rose might not want to be his friend anymore once they got their OWL results. Maybe you could elaborate on it a bit more, like... hmm, maybe Scorp thought Rose would be angry and jealous if he did better? Or maybe she would decide he wasn't worth her time if he did poorly? Or, you could even change it around and have them receiving their NEWT results, and finding out if they got into their chosen career path and would be working together in the future. Just some ideas, anyway, since I found that part a little confusing!

Something I also would have liked to see would be more descriptions of their history as friends, even really brief mentions to work into their dialogue. Then again, part of the charm of your story is how it's short and sweet and a small moment in time, so feel free to disregard this comment! :)

Anyway, great job with this, and good on you for changing up the essence of Scorose! I really enjoyed this! :D

PS. Hm, it won't let me leave a review from my account despite being signed in. Strange. And now it's making me identify a flashing picture of Dumbledore! Technology, gotta love it! :)

Author's Response: Hello, thank you for coming by :)

It's great to hear that you got an easygoing and yet committed sense from reading about Rose and Scorpius's friendship. I based their banter on relationships I have with my own friends, and they're full of little moments where my friends easily predict my behavior.

Yeah, I try to sprinkle little details here and there so you aren't inundated with back story but you also get some sense of who the characters are. I also definitely tried to keep things realistic with their grades so neither of them were carbon copies of their parents.

I meant for this to be more like a drabble than a "real" story, so it is intended to be sort of simple and short. However, I can definitely see how adding in a few more smidgens of back story and elaborating more on how Scorpius expected Rose to react could add in that last little piece that's sort of missing here. I'll keep that in mind and try to go back and edit this piece a little when I have a chance. Thank you for mentioning those critiques!

Thanks for your fantastic review!


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