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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi A&A (if you don't mind me asking, are you Alicia or Anne?)

I listened to this story over at HPPC and had to come review it! I'm excited to see that there are two more posted chapters, and can't wait to get the time to read those as well!

This was a really creative beginning to what seems like an awesome story. I loved that you gave us something to grip into: Harry's fear. Was his family attacked? Was the man who never gets a break going to have to deal with more horrors even after the terrible things he'd seen as a teenager?

Or...was he going to find his teenage son laying face down heart broken over his mum cancelling which weekly... hahahah!

I think that the annoyance Harry starts to feel is perfect. He was sensitive when he thought James had his heart broken by a girl, and that was awesome. He's been there; he understands. Then when he realized he'd hurt himself and been scared out of his wits because his son was mourning the loss of a magazine, his impatience grew. That felt really natural and I was just giggling all through that section.

One thing I would suggest is maybe changing the Santa Clause thing. I know it's meant to be funny, but in sort of disrupted an already really funny chapter for me and de-aged them in a not awesome way. I do like the idea of something being spoiled in the process of this for Albus, but why not making it age appropriate? Harry is logical and Ginny is very no-nonsense, so I do think they'd have already told their 12/14/15 year old son that Santa Clause does not exist :P. Maybe you could do something like, 'Who knows, she's probably off ruining more lives. Maybe she's telling Albus that his Quaffle signed by *insert quidditch player here* is just a plain old Quaffle that she signed herself.'

Just something that would still be really disappointing without making us wonder all the sudden if Albus is actually a seven year old :P.

Moving on! Your writing flowed so perfectly in this. You transitioned us from Harry's fear, realization, annoyance then by the time you ended it we had a very good idea of what kind of story we're in for. I love that. I love that you captured my attention from the start and by the time I reached the end, I was even more excited to find out what happens next. Harry dealing with a house of three teenagers, one of those being a daughter who has him wrapped around her finger, all without Ginny is really going to be a challenge. Everything from your first paragraph to the last kept me really submerged into this, and I'm so excited to read on!

Author's Response: Heya hun!
I'm actually called Tammi haha, so neither of them actually. It was the name of two characters from a story that I wrote with my friend when we used to fan fiction together, and now it's just me.

I'm so glad that you liked the podcast, Aditi is great isn't she? :D I'm so glad that you like that there's more chapters. I hope that you enjoy them.

I'm so happy that you like the whole fear factor with Harry, who would have guessed that he would find James heartbroken over a magazine?

I'm so glad that it made you giggle with Harry, I would be annoyed as well if that happened to me.

Thank you for your suggestion, I was trying to think of something that would cause Albus to react like that and Santa Claus was all I could think of at the time. But I love your suggestion, is it okay if I use it? Just change it up a little? I absolutely love your idea!

Your kind words in this review have made my day. I'm so glad that you liked my writing in this and I'm so thankful for your help, I appreciate it so much.
Thank you!


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