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Review:HeyMrsPotter says:
Hello! I was really exited to see you had added a new chapter to this, it's quickly becoming my favourite story on here!
I love that you're writing chapters from minor characters' POVs, and using them to explain the changes in the Wizarding world after the war, like using Stan in this chapter to tell the reader how Azkaban has changed.
I'm glad that you decided to tone down the cockney dialect for Stan's inner monologue, what you wrote on the forums was really strong and I think it would have been difficult to read but this was perfect. It amazes me that you managed to describe the scene and the emotions perfectly using Stan's voice and yet keep him in character, he's not the most intelligent person after all!
The only thing that I picked up on here in terms of CC is that if you're trying to stick to cannon, Umbridge was actually sent to Azkaban herself for her hate crimes against muggle-borns. Though she does work well in this chapter.
Other than that, another fantastic chapter!

Author's Response: Hi! I'm so happy that you're enjoying this story, I really love working on it and it's so reassuring to get such positive feedback. I'm glad you liked Stan's story! :)

Ok, I'm really glad to hear you thought the dialect was suitable because I was worrying a bit about it! I actually really liked getting in his head, and I've grown rather attached to him since, haha!

Excellent point about Umbridge! My idea is that she managed to swindle herself out of getting in trouble and back into power by doing her combination of threatening, blackmailing and "charming" people. I think I'll add in a clarifying note about that to the story. It might show too how justice really isn't fair in the corrupt Ministry. Do you think that would work better? :)

Thank you so much for this lovely and helpful review!! The next chapter is in the queue and switches things up a little, I hope you get a chance to read it, and enjoy it! :D


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