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Review:Toujours Padfoot says:
"We know where they are." Sirius thought that this might have been his moment to speak, but had guessed wrong;
- I cannot un-imagine him as a dog, trying so hard to make Beth love him again after peeing all over the floor. Poor Sirius waited for James to speak first, then announced the juicy good news in hopes that positive news would rub off on himself and he'd be viewed as positive, too, but Beth is rightfully maintaining her cold shoulder. Her expression when she saw him at her door was LOL. Sirius is a brave soul for stepping into her flat after she gave him the icy gaze of doom.

By the time James had finished, Beth had raised her hands to her mouth, pressing her fingers against her lips. She looked as though she wanted to laugh and cry at the same time.
- The description of Beth here gave us a picture of the physical toll taken on her due to emotional stress. The shadows under her wide eyes, the fingers raised to her lips in a fragile sort of gesture - it brought to mind someone strong who has been kind of chipping away. Through the eyes of Sirius and James, she seems almost brittle. Through her own eyes she's much stronger, more full of fire, but I absolutely love that you've shown her from another perspective and given us an unbiased glimpse of what Beth is going through. I think she overestimates the persona of normality she's putting on. It's definitely not fooling her friends.

Sirius felt that she was doing a marvelous impersonation of Professor McGonagall at the moment.
- Sirius, I love you. I love every little thought that floats through your odd little brain.

Okay Beth is really and truly intimidating when I am not seeing the world directly through her eyes. FROM SIRIUS'S POV SHE IS LIKE ALMOST AS BAD AS DUMBLEDORE RIGHT NOW. I AM SCARED FOR HIM TO BE ALONE WITH HER, SHE MIGHT JUST KILL HIM.

dskjfkdfj ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ THEY HUGGED!!! ♥ & hearts; ♥ I am so happy that their little tiff seems to be drawing to a close. Beth really needs friends at this point, maybe even more than she realizes. I've noticed her starting to retreat into herself in these past few months, becoming much more introverted, much more closed-off. Sirius is so annoyingly persistent that he'll shake some of the old Beth out of her one way or another. I'm so pleased that he's serving his penance this way by trying to make amends. HE IS THE BEST. ♥

Three chapters left to write. D: Lucky for me, there's still plenty left to be posted!


Author's Response: The kicked-puppy image literally works so well for him in this chapter, though. And the last one. SIRIUS IS JUST A PUPPY THAT'S PERPETUALLY PEED. ♥ I think that he can't stand to have people mad at him, even when he knows he royally screwed up, and maybe he's even not really that used to having people mad at him. James always put him in his place at school, but no one else ever really did, not like they needed to. It's almost humbling to have Beth as mad at him as she is; I don't think he really knows what to make of it still.

I'm so glad you pay attention to details like that. ♥ And the weird thing is -- and I don't think I was able to articulate it until you wrote me that particular paragraph about Beth's fragility behind strength -- that you see things in ways that I do not, and that is one of the things that is so gratifying about having you as a reviewer. ♥ I never explicitly think about Beth as being fragile while acting strong, but it's how I /see/ her in my head and I honestly think it's just the neatest thing that you're able to put that into words where I apparently don't, or can't. She thinks of herself as this strong, impenetrable wall, standing strong even after everything on the outside's working to break her down. But it's working, and that's what objective eyes can see.

Dude, Beth is freaking scary when she's angry at Sirius. I love her so much for it. ♥ SIRIUS IS ALL FOR YOU ALWAYS, ARE YOU GETTING TIRED OF HEARING IT YET.

You wrote about Beth up there like she was a real person. This is one of the coolest reviews you've ever, ever written to me. She seems so real when you're writing about her! ♥

Three chapters /still/ left to write because I am literally the laziest sod on the planet. But you love me anyway. :3

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