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Review:-BookDinosaur- says:
-BookDinosaur- here with your requested review!

This was a really good first chapter. You really had me hooked. I wanted to know more, about Dominique, about the werewolves, about everything.

I loved the suspense and tension that you put in the story, and that we didn't have to wait too long for the action to start. I also enjoyed all your description-you never spent too long telling us about what the place looked like, yet I have a clear picture in my head of it.

Your backstory about Dominique is good, I feel like it makes sense for her to be scared of werewolves after growing up with Bill's scarred face. Also, Cannock Chase Forest is a good setting for this story, it sounds believable enough. ;)

Your characterisation is good, I feel like I know Dominique already. I definently felt her urgency to get away at the start and her fear at the end. Oh, and speaking of the end, I think yours was really good.

Just one small mistake at the end I noticed: You say that her 'lips emit a shrill screech'. I think that should be 'mouth', but really, feel free to ignore me.

I'm really interested to see how Dominique copes with this crisis.

So, all in all, great chapter, I really enjoyed reading it.

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

I am pleased you found this a good first chapter and wanted to know more about stuff.

Its great to know that you liked all the suspense and tension, and enjoyed the action. I am glad you liked my descriptions too, thanks.

I always thought that Bill's kids would be affected by his scars in some way or another, and I interpreted Dom's fear from there, so I am glad it made sense to you. I did some (muggle) research on werewolf sightings and such, and this name cropped up, and I liked it, so I put it in, I am pleased you like the forest name!

You've made me really happy by saying that you like Dominique as a character, that you felt her urgency and fear, and you liked the end. Thanks!

Thanks for your advice, though personally I like 'lips' better =)

Thank you for your lovely review!


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