|Review:||Bobby Dazzler says:|
First off I would like to kick off this review with a huge SORRY for not reading and reviewing this sooner, particularly before the challenge actually ended - feel incredibly slack for that but unfortunately I have had endless problems with my laptop and been unable to use it, which unfortunately meant unable to read this too, so I am very, very sorry about that :(
Now that that's all said and done, let me first congratulate you on a very unique interpretation of the challenge. I wasn't expecting something like this, but I very much enjoyed it! It was definitely original, well done :)
My favourite part of this is, although it was written from Sacharissa's POV, granted being third person, we don't know much about her. Yes, she is a perfectionist. Yes, she invented a potion. She's in her 7th year. She's friends with a few people. But as for herself, we don't know much. Her hair colour, her eyes. We know a little about her outward appearance, but only from being compared to others who she sees as being perfect, and THAT'S what I loved about it. We learnt who she was and what she was about by her obsessive comparison to her views of perfection in others, and only saw her focusing on the negativity in herself. Reason I love it so much is cuz it was a different way of getting that message across without being obvious, "she didn't like her body, or grades, or blah blah" - where's the fun in that?! I really admire how you got everything you needed to get across without going the obvious route, well done!
The characterisation, plot, flow and description were all great. I can't fault it, and you followed the challenge guidelines wonderfully, and interpreted them in your own way which is even better. I enjoyed every minute reading this, so thank you so much for taking the time to enter the comp and writing such a clever little peice (sometimes short stories are all that's needed without killing it with too much info, so don't stress about that, you did great :)) I know the challenge has ended, but I have one more story to read now and I will get back to you on the forums how you went ok :) But thank you very, very much for taking the time to enter this challenge, and I am very sorry that I was unable to judge it on time due to technical difficulties. It was great, thank you :) Kate xx
Author's Response: oh of course!! don't worry about it; computer problems happens to everyone ^^
I'm glad that you liked that we knew little about what Sacharissa disliked about herself because most of the time, I feel that feeling dissatisfied with yourself isn't just about wanting to fix one thing. At least to me, it's this feeling of over-all inferiority (even if it's not true) that really takes over when you want to be perfect, etc.
Writing short stories are definitely my favorite; it's not only challenging but I love to be able to know that I can, to the best of my ability, convey a message in as little words as possibly needed.
This was a WONDERFUL challenge!!! I'm glad that I entered too! Thanks so much! (: