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Review:Calypso says:
Hey there- here with your second review!

I feel so bad for Dom! It was especially sad to have her not remember what happened at first- it seemed to make the reality all the more crushing. The description of the hospital as "clean and sterile but not quite familiar" was perfect. A minor nitpick is that I think "Healer" is meant to be capitalised?

I thought that her family's reactions were all very realistic. Fleur and Victoire seem quite similar at the moment in the way they found it hard to deal with, and Bill seems very in character, trying to comfort everyone. And ohmygod Teddy is just the sweetest! It was so lovely how he was trying to comfort her, and I get exactly why she pushed him away, but I still feel sorry for him!
And moving onto Dominique, I thought you captured her emotions brilliantly- the grief, then the anger, then the awful flatness. The bit where she screamed at Victoire was especially poignant.

A very emotionally fraught chapter, but another good one! I hope that Dominique can learn to deal with her new identity somehow :/

-Bethany

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing. I apologise for how slow I am in responding to your lovely reviews.

I am pleased that Dom's emotions came through easily in the narrative, and that you liked the description of the hospital. Yes uh that's a typo maybe, I'll look into it.

I am glad you liked her family's reaction, and that they seemed in character. Teddy is awesome isn't he? I love him =P

Its great to hear that you think I did justice to Dom's emotions as well, thanks.

Thank you for all your kind words!


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