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Review:adluvshp says:
Here for the second review (for the review swap).

OMG I loved this! I love angst filled one-shots and this was a treat to read. I have written a Dominique/Teddy/Victoire triangle story myself so I enjoy the scenario immensely and it was great to see how you portrayed it.

I loved your characterisation of Dominique - of the way she compared herself to her fourteen-year-old self, and then to one of "those girls" she had become now. Your descriptions were simply splendid and got across the emotions beautifully. The way she reflected on everything was heart-wrenching and I just wanted to reach out to her and give her a hug.

Teddy seems horrible, but of course if he's toying with his wife and the wife's sister, he's bound to be so.

I also liked your description of Victoire as sweet and innocent, it made everything all the more heartbreaking.

The ending was the most painful though. When Teddy is at the door and Dominique has to made a decision, oh I can imagine her dilemma. It was almost a cliffhanger that you left us at though, I'd have loved to find out whether she let him in or not!

Really though, great story! There's no surprise that you won the first place in the challenge. I really loved it.

10/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hello again! :)

Gotta love angst! I'm so glad you enjoyed reading this, and enjoyed the portrayal of the characters- especially seeing as you've written a Dominique/Teddy/Vic triangle (which I've read, and is great btw!)

I'm so glad that you liked Dominique, because a couple of reviewers have mentioned that she's not very likable. Haha yeah, I think a big hug would sort out a lot of problems for her!

Yeah, Teddy's a bit of jerk. I've always imagined that he might have had a bit of an unstable childhood, and in a way, he's as harmed by the relationship as Dominique... It's great to hear that Victoire came across alright too!

I kind of wanted to leave the ending open for the reader to decide... (and cliffhangers are my guilty pleasure :P)

Thankyou so much for this great reivew! You're too sweet! I'm so happy that you enjoyed it :)

-Bethany


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