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Review:marauder5 says:
Hey, here's review number 3! :D

It makes sense that Dominique would worry about being treated differently. In the HP books, people have a lot of prejudices against werewolves, and even if things have changed for the better, they probably still exist.

I liked the flashback with Teddy asking Dom to be his girlfriend. I'm glad that Victoire was so magnanimous and that she didn't mind. If I'd comment about one thing it would be the dialogue between the sisters in that sequence. I don't know exactly what it was, but it didn't seem fully natural. But since I can't give you a concrete example, you can just ignore that ;) You could always take a second look at it and see if you know what I mean, but it's just a minor thing, so don't worry too much about it!

I think that Dominique's boss was being quite heartless. She should be feeling super guilty - in my mind, the whole thing is her fault!

As for Teddy, I'm eager to find out what he's upset about, if it's just the way Dominique is treating him or if it's something else (the name of the next chapter hints that something else will happen...) I do feel bad for him, and I hope that Dom will apologize for saying those awful thing, and then not responding to his owls (although I get that she needs time to sort out her mind).

I'm totally sucked into the story by now! I think that your writing is brilliant, and the plot is very intriguing. It will be interesting to see how she'll adapt to this new life! I loved this chapter :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing again!

I am glad Dominique's worries make sense to you. Yes, there's a lot of prejudice about werewolves, and even though in Next-Gen times may have improved, you can't really wipe out prejudices completely.

I am glad you liked the flashback. Some people have pointed out that the dialogue seemed off, too, so I'll look into it again and edit =)

Dominique's boss is quite unsympathetic yes. We'll see more of her in future, and you just may be right haha.

Teddy is a sensible guy so he won't really mull over what his girlfriend said to him too much =) Dom will apologise though, she's not a bad person.

I am so flattered that you're into the story, and you like it so far. Thanks!


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