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Review:Jchrissy says:
You know, I guess maybe because I've been reading these quickly that I haven't noticed quite as much before, but now that RL went a bit psycho on me and I'm just getting back I have to say that your writing has gotten so much better through the course of this story. Not that it was ever bad or anything like that, but you're adding in more description in more subtle ways, your giving your characters way to develop themselves through their actions. Like in this chapter--

Charlie is really embarrassed about getting in trouble, well sort of trouble, in class. But she also thought James's joke was funny with the curse me sign. Those are two very small things and just fit naturally into this chapter but they do a ton to help keep us on track about what kind of person Charlie is. She's a good student to a point and wants to do well, but it's more authority that scares her than bad grades. She's only ever really had her mom to yell at her, and who cares about that. So getting called out by a teacher is a lot scarier. But she's also not exactly a goody girl that has a problem with a joke now and then. She's very normal in the best sense of the word. You haven't tried to make her over the top with anything and I really love that about her.

Anyway, your writing really has improved a lot through the course of this and I'm anxious to finish and start one of your newer novels and see the difference between those and this!

Although I'm partially not excited to finish this because then I know somethings going to have to happen :(. Either Tori will come back, and that will cause some serious issues, or she won't and the reason that she won't will cause issues too I'm sure.

Another thing I really love is that while Charlie's life seems to be getting better, more stable, Tori's is falling. Tori started out on top of the world ready to take on the school, and now she's just breaking more and more severely. Charlie started out terrified of this all and really not okay, but she's slowly coming out of her shell and is becoming not just social, but she's really making such good friends and a very sweet bf.

Speaking of sweet, James's line about what he would do if Tori came back. Oh gosh, heart throb much? Maybe I'll switch places with Charlie ;).

Another very lovely chapter ♥

Author's Response: Gah! I can't tell you how sorry I am about how long this review took! *looks away in shame* However I'm here now, so everyone can let out a giant round of applause and I can go beet red and stammer out my thanks.

Right. I'm glad you think my writing has improved! I think so too (I know, I'm spectacularly modest) especially when I compare the first chapter of this to the last chapter!

Yes! You are 100% right about Charlie's life getting better and Tori's slowly getting worse. I was wondering whether anyone would pick up on that :P

Thank you for the lovely review!

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