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Review:nott theodore says:
I thought I'd left a review for this but obviously I hadn't, so here we go...

I don't think I've said this before but your chapter titles really make me laugh. And this story has quite a few funny moments as well, and I still can't get over how well you write in different styles for different stories. Even if you said you find it difficult, you manage to make it look easy, and the tone here is perfect for the sort of story this is.

I think you capture being 15 brilliantly as well. Some things that are actually really small seem like such a big deal to Al and Lucy, and you just know that when they look back at what was important to them then in a few years time, they're going to have to laugh at themselves.

Having read Animal Magnetism, I want to knock Al and Lucy's heads together even more here! I mean, I know they can't get together until they actually get together in the story (I'm not sure that made sense, but hopefully you know what I mean) but the misunderstandings are ridiculous sometimes! Especially the bit in the owlery, when they're both talking about being in love and being hurt by someone you love, thinking that they're talking about someone else and feeling like their heart is breaking, when in fact they're talking about each other. It's frustratingly funny (I probably shouldn't be enjoying their strife this much, should I?)

I've said before that I like Al's flaws because it makes him a real character, and I think what comes through best here is that he is flawed and doesn't have the confidence to ask Lucy out. I think most people are like that, although a lot of stories have both Al and James being very confident and outgoing and good with girls, and I find myself wondering where they got it from, because it certainly wasn't Harry!

Another enjoyable and readable chapter, and I'm hoping this means that Facing Tomorrow will be updated soon (I saw you mention something about writing a chapter of one before you submit a chapter of the other on the forums).

Sian :)

Author's Response: I have so much fun coming up with the chapter titles for this story, although sometimes it's a bit tricky. I'm glad I pull off the two different styles convincingly, although I'll be glad when this story is finished and I can just focus on 'Facing Tomorrow'. writing in two very different styles is doing my head in! :)

I love the angst and tension and drama so I'm practically thriving off the fact that these two are so blind. The owlery scene in particular is so funny because they're both wishing the other is talking about them when they actually are. I enjoy the strife too :)

I definitely agree about Al and James so often being written as super confident and great with the ladies. I can believe it in one of them since their mother was rather confident (once she got past her infatuation with Harry when she was young), but not really both of them. Plus I like writing Al as all nervy and constantly beating himself up mentally.

I'm so close to having this story finished, there'll probably be only two or three chapters left, and I'm finding it hard to keep motivated because I want to write Facing Tomorrow but I'll get there.

Thanks again for the lovely review!


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