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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
I love this chapter! It's so sweet, and I love the way you describe the chemistry between Molly and Campbell - you make them look like such a cute and believable couple!

The characterisation of Molly is so in depth and realistic - I think it's impossible to not fall in love with her. You can still see streaks of Percy in her now and again, which is awesome, and I think you write her thoughts and emotions incredibly well. The way she kind if contrasts with her sister's spontaneous personality is so original, and how she breaks the stereotypical image of herself. Sorry if that doesn't that make sense!

The plot development is at a perfect pace - quick enough to build suspense and tension, but then slow enough and steady enough so we can take it all in.
The whole last paragraph is such an inventive metaphor about running! I love the way she realises that she's been running TO Campbell - I thought that was a really thoughtful and insightful touch, and added even more depth to their relationship.

Overall, a really engaging, quirky and awesome addition to the story! Plus, you didn't go overboard on the romance and sappiness, you got the balance perfectly.

Sophie :D

Author's Response: Hi Sophie!

Another review? You spoil me! I get so excited every time I see a review from you because your comments are always so lovely!

I'm glad you think they seem like a believable couple. I know what you mean about Molly's character - you managed to get exactly what I was trying to do with her. She does have elements of Percy in her and she behaves a lot like him, but that doesn't define her completely. I wanted the first meeting with Campbell, when Molly goes in all business with no real idea of what to expect, to be the turning point for her in a way.

I'm so happy you think I got the balance right! It's so hard to do and I worried so much that it was too romantic and too sappy when I wrote it, so it's good to know you think it wasn't either.

Thanks for another review!

Sian :)

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