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Review:missclaire17 says:
I freaking LOVED this chapter!
All of the intensity when it came to the match and how Della had a breakdown too because she was forced to become captain since Alfie wasn't going to be there. AND the fact that Alfie LAST-MINUTE couldn't make the game was just INTENSE!
Not to mention the actual game itself and trying to take out one of the Lynches.

I love how incorporated Carlotta is with James's family; the bit with Charlie was so funny when Charlie confronted James about it and how Carlotta was so fascinated with dragons. Molly Weasley would have a complete fit if James didn't invite Carlotta to their Weasley lunch; it seems like exactly the type of thing that Molly would do xD

I loved this chapter!!! It was a great update(:

Author's Response: I must confess, Alfie's no-show was totally contrived (mind you, isn't everything in fiction contrived? But I digress) so that I could move the Ryan/Della storyline on a bit, and I think it also develops Della's character a bit. I certainly enjoyed writing it! But on the whole it's really reassuring to know you enjoyed the match because it really was a slog to write!

I'm a bit concerned of running the risk of almost 'forgetting' that Carlotta is a Muggle - just because she knows about James' world doesn't mean she's suddenly going to become fully integrated into it, she's always going to be coming across new concepts. And for her, it must be the most bewildering thing in the world to meet a dragon-keeper! She's definitely incorporated in the sense that she gets on with his family and vice versa, but it will take a while for her to become fully accustomed to being in the magical world, and the next few chapters in particular have a bit of focus on that. Thanks for reviewing! :)


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