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Review:patronus_charm says:
I saw you post about this on the forums and I meant to check it out as it looked really cool :D

I really, really liked how you gave the prisoner a number and only referred to her as that. It really reminded me of the concentration camps and what the Jews had to suffer in there, and I always thought of Azkaban as the wizarding alternative to that, so that was a really great comparison.

Like you said, it took away her personality and identity and broke her down to his simplest form and it was so effective and I could sense throughout the story, add that in with the sense of isolation and you really caught what being a prisoner in Azkaban must have been like.

I should have carried on reading before writing that, and then I wouldn’t have had to of used pronouns and could have used her proper name instead. Wow this was from Mrs Crouch’s perspective? That was a really great idea, because to be honest, I never thought much about how she ended up there, but know you brought up here it made me want to know and it was really thought provoking.

I also really liked the flashback and you really caught the emotions Mr and Mrs Crouch must have been feeling. I liked how you showed that they clearly loved one another, it was so tender and bittersweet and it was nice to see Crouch being portrayed in a good light. I always felt a little bad for him, so I liked that you almost made it up to him here by giving his wife one final wish before she died.

Then the ending was great too, and how you showed how conflicted she was about her son and her husband was brilliant. All of them are a tragic family in fact, not just Mr Crouch. I think they’re all so misunderstood yet have these powerful emotions running through them and you really caught that in this one-shot.

The only CC I would give is perhaps space it out a bit more. In the flashback and sometimes in the present there were no gaps between the paragraphs which made it a little harder to read, but other than that it was an excellent job!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the lovely review! I'm really glad you liked the story. The Crouch family has always been one that I liked, it's so sad and tragic and I've wanted to write about it for a while.
I wanted to take her identity away completely which is why I left out who's perspective it was until later in the story. Azkaban always seemed to be that sort of place that you just become a number.
Thank you for the tip about the spacing, I've got something waiting to be validated but once it is I'll edit that :)
Again, thanks so much for the lovely review :)


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