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Review:patronus_charm says:
Normally it takes me ages to re-tag and I tend to forget what happens, but I saw you pop and grabbed the chance!

Ooh I spotted a typo here I have been worried sick, h said you missed out the e after the h :)

I thought the scene where Dom and Teddy were finally out with their feelings was really good and well done. I liked how you made Teddy almost accusatory at first, and that they werent immediately reconciled as it gave the scene a more realistic feel and I connected with the character better. I also really liked the nod towards Remus, and I had been wondering when that would come up.

I really liked how you built up the suspense and it had me sitting on the edge of my sit. I had all these possibilities running through me head and it was fun to pick out the most likely. It did sound very ominous though with Teddy going away for it, and then the healer being there to deliver news.

Ooh I understand why you posted that topic in the forums now! It seemed likely that would happen, and I thought Doms reaction was great with the initial confusion of it all then the shock setting in. Im glad that Vic and Fleur were there, as it would have been nicer than just being alone.

One suggestion for one Fleur talked would be to perhaps add a French accent to it such as changing the you to ou to give it a more authentic feel. Other than that I really enjoyed both her and Vics characterisations and it was nice to get to see a bit more of them, albeit in not very nice circumstances.

Ooh and a decision has to be made how exciting and it was a great cliff hanger to leave it on, and now I cant wait for the first full moon!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Oh thanks for spotting that typo. I'll edit it =)

I am pleased you liked the Dom/Teddy scene, and found it realistic too, and that you could connect with them. Yes of course, there had to be a talk about Remus, I couldn't skip that.

Oh I am always wary when it comes to building suspense as I am not sure if I am good at it, but I am so happy you liked how I did it. I was exactly going for ominous so it's a pleasure to hear that it worked.

Haha yes the topic in the forums was a kind of give-away right, but I had to take opinions on whether it was possible or not before proceeding with it. I am pleased you liked Dom's reaction as well as Fleur and Victoire's presence.

I contemplated putting in a french accent for Fleur but decided against it because 1) I am not sure if I can really pull it off 2) I assumed that over the years her accent may have faded. But after reading your (and some others') reviews, I will re-think my decision.

I am glad you enjoyed the characterisations, and you're liking the story. The first full moon is still a little further away but yeah =)

Thanks!


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