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Review:MargaretLane says:
Do they use the phrase "shotgun" for riding up front in the UK? Sounds kind of American to me.

Generally, each time a person speaks, you put it on a new line. It's a bit confusing the way you have numerous people speaking in each paragraph here. Easy to get lost as to who's speaking.

I'm really wondering if Ginny knows more than she's letting on here. I kind of get the impression she does.

You seem to jump a little quickly from the conversation between Lily and Ginny to them going through the barrier. I realise you're showing that they don't have much time to talk, but I still think you could focus a little more on Lily's apprehension and her feeling that Ginny doesn't really mean "nothing".

You are really building suspense there. I really like the way Ginny's reaction indicates something worrying is going on, but we don't know what. Makes us want to read on and find out more. So giving it a little more time would be good.

Love your paragraph about her thoughts as she approaches the barrier between Platforms 9 and 10. Very well written.

Like the idea of a magical and non-magical twin. Would be interesting to see how it affects their relationship. I hope we'll see more of October and get to know her better.

You've said later on though that her brother is younger, so I'm a bit confused.

I'm looking forward to seeing what houses your characters will be in. I'm guessing Gryffindor for the three of them.

Author's Response: As I think you know by now, your guess is right! All three of the trio are in GRYFFINDOR! ROAR! And October's brother isn't younger, he is her twin. And Ginny does know more than she lets on... DUN DUN DUN!

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