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Review:patronus_charm says:
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I really liked reading the flashback, as I was really intrigued to see what way you went on how Teddy and Dom ended up together. I’m glad that he and Victoire had an amicable breakup and that she was happy with someone else now, as that’s how I imagined it to be. I liked seeing their tender, innocent relationship and it was really sweet.

I haven’t see ‘editor’ capitalised before but you did it here ‘It was her Editor.’ So I thought I would just point it out in case it was a typo or whatever :)

I’m not really sure whether to be pleased or not by her editor’s reaction to the situation. Though Dom gets to keep her job and the editor wasn’t running away screaming ‘werewolf’ it still isn’t the best option for her. I suppose it would give wizards and witches a clearer idea of what she has to go through on a day to day basis, and thus attract more supporters, yet it still isn’t the nicest thing to go through.

The wording of this was a little odd ‘However, she had not seen him since three days.’ I think you need an ago if you’re using since, if not you could just change since to for.

Ooh and Teddy’s back! I really liked Dom’s thoughts prior to him arriving and they seemed to be like a love sick girlfriend, and then his arrival was great. The way he just came in and kissed her made me want to aw for ages. I hope we get to have more scenes with them together as I really liked that scene!

A great chapter!

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, and apologies for the late response.

I am pleased you liked the flashback, and the relationship they shared.

Oh I capitalised it at first and then realised it wasn't meant to be so, and went back and de-capitalised it, but apparently I missed in a place or so. Thanks for pointing it out, I'll go back and edit.

I think in the Next-Gen period no one will really be openly hostile to werewolves though they may harbour a prejudice within. Dom's boss is not the best person, true, and we'll see more of her.

English not being my native language, I do tend to make some mistakes in phrasing, so thanks for pointing it out. I'll change it =)

I am glad you liked Dom's thoughts about Teddy, and then him arriving. I am not sure what you mean by him coming and kissing her because I am pretty sure I left the chapter at "Teddy Lupin stood before her and his lips were unsmiling for the first time in ages." or something along those lines, but I am glad you like Teddy and Dom, and you'll definitely see more scenes of them!

Thanks!


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