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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hey there! So, I finally got around to reading your magnificent entry for my challenge! Sorry about the delay!

This was a really cute piece of writing! I loved your characterizations of all the characters, especially Sirius. I loved how dramatic he was, and I think you used the quote you were given perfectly - it seemed like such a Sirius thing to say! I think my favourite line had to be: “Ah, MacDonald, so little faith. But no, we aren’t,” Sirius replied, throwing an arm around her shoulders. That was just perfect!

I also liked how you added the discussion of the war, and how Peter seemed to be uncertain of whether he wanted to fight. It was sort of chilling, hearing all these characters who become a part of the Order of the Phoenix discussing the war, especially when they all end up dead (sob!)

Another little bit that made me laugh was this bit: “My parents told me—” The three boys snorted and he rolled his eyes and conceded, “Okay. I overheard my parents talking about how they wanted to start an organisation, like Voldemort’s—” Not only did we get a small glimpse into the beginnings of the order, but that such a James thing to say, and made me laugh.

I loved the Jily feels at the end of the chapter, and their discussion was so perfect! It definitely made me a little sad, hearing their hopes that the world would be a better place for their kids but I loved the way you ended this chapter.

Nice job!
Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hello! :D

Don't worry about the delay, there was never any rush. :)

I'm so glad you liked it! As soon as I read the quote, I actually screamed: "SIRIUS!" :p

I felt like our poor Marauders didn't really have a very fun childhood, so I wanted to throw that in there. :'(

ahaha James was a mischievous little bugger, we all know that. And I could imagine him eavesdropping on his parents ahaha. :p

hehe what's a Jily fanfic without sad Jily feels? :p

Thank you for this lovely review, and thanks for putting out the challenge! :D


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