Wow. So, let me just say that you wrote Cho SO beautifully in this chapter about her.
In one of my college classes, we are talking about how Asian women are portrayed in literature, so obviously Cho was brought up. So many people (apparently) seemed to think that Cho fit right into the stereotype of an Asian woman lamenting over a white man and being so utterly helpless, etc etc.
Obviously, I had to have my input about how there was so much more to Cho than what people think of her, and I think you did an excellent job portraying how Cho became like she was in OotP and onwards.
The fact that she's still lamenting Cedric's death and the fact that it affected her that much because he was her boyfriend, her first love, her everything just makes it so much different than just some woman lamenting for a man. I love how you wrote that Cho thought it was unfair for Cedric to have to die when the others, like herself, who are less brave lived on. I think that really speaks to what Cho was and what Cho is now.
She wasn't inherently a brave person; she wasn't sorted into Gryffindor for a reason. In her "prime" youth days, she was surrounded by laughter and was a wonderful athlete. Then, all of a sudden, her boyfriend is dead, no one believes the truth about his death, she is thrown into the start of a War much bigger than herself, and somehow, no one seemed to remember that she was still so young when everything started.
Cho wasn't brave, and she isn't brave, and I mean that in the best way possible. Being brave isn't one of Cho's strengths and it really affected her, having to go through this War and having to see all of the horrors.
It makes so much sense for Cho to marry a Muggle because then, he would not have been present for all of the things that she had to go through, and I think she really needs that break, something that you portray really well in this chapter.
She can never forget Cedric, never forget what happened, so if she's with someone who was tied up in everything that happened, she can never try to move on from her life. You portrayed her pain so well that after reading this, it really clicked in my mind why J.K. Rowling wrote that Cho married a Muggle.
Honestly, I think you did a WONDERFUL job portraying Cho. (:
Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review, I appreciate all of your thoughts. I found Cho to be a really interesting character and I think because of Harry's interaction with her we get a very subjective view of her in canon.
She obviously cared for Cedric very much because she became involved with him after the Yule Ball and they were still involved when he died. For a fifteen year old girl that sort of tragedy must be absolutely horrifying.
I agree with what you say about Cho marrying a muggle, it just seems to make sense really. But I think she will always have a place in her heart for Cedric, and that's what I wanted to convey here.
Thanks so much for your review!