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Review:teh tarik says:
Hi there :) I was floating around the Recently Added and I came across this story.

This is such an amazing story. It's very graphic and is quite a terrifying portrait of the final moment of some unnamed fighter in the first war. There are so many vivid details which just made me pause: You want to drop to the ground like a broken marionette with your hair splaying out behind you, shining against the black soil; pale eyes staring up at the starless sky. This was a very nicely worded sentence. The imagery of your story is certainly very dark, full of death and loss and horror.

It really is a little startling to see how much the main character wants to die, how much he or she wants to give up the fight. At the same time, he or she is so defiant - defiant in not wanting to fight, to protect herself. The bit with the Cruciatus curse was just painful to read.

For a first attempt at second person narration, this was done amazingly well. Your writing is smooth and well-paced. I think you made a very good choice in leaving the protagonist unknown and unnamed. It works well with the second person POV. This person could be anyone - and so many died senseless deaths in the first war. The fact that the MC is unknown sort of forces a distance between the reader and the character, but the intimacy of the second person narration really fills in that gap - in the most heartrending way possible. Sorry I'm not making much sense here.

Anyway, great story :) I really enjoyed reading this. And, I'm not sure who the MC is; I would have to say that it's the member of the Order whom Voldemort killed personally - I think this was mentioned in OotP. I can't remember her name! Dorcas Meadowes?

Great stuff.

-teh

Author's Response: Hello!

Wow, thank you for all your kind compliments, they really mean a lot to me! ♥

I have to admit, that was my favourite sentence to write. I was just about to put it in the queue and it came to me so I shuffled everything around and plopped it in there, glad it works well! :p

No, no! You made heaps of sense. And you're far too sweet! ♥

YES.

IT WAS DORCAS MEADOWES! I'm so glad you've picked it out! Of course, people can have their own opinions but that's who I thought of as I was writing it! I'm so glad you got it!

*hands you a gold star* :p

Thanks for the amazing review! :D


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