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Hi! I'm here to review your entry for my challenge. =]

I liked your plot idea. Umbridge is certainly a perfect character for the emotion you got. The choosing of characters was perfect =] Your flow looks good and the grammar was good too.

I think you need to work on this story overall a bit. I'll say that you should write a description of why Umbridge hates everything and everyone so much instead of writing her opinions about the things and people she hates. There must be a reason, don't you think so? If you could explore it, it'd be nice. =]

Your title is- Pink: The Colour of Hatred but you aren't quite describing why pink is the colour of hatred. Either you should write a bit about the relation between the colour and the emotion or you can think about a different title.

Otherwise, I really enjoyed reading this. =] Well done! Oh and thanks for your participation in the Single Emotion Challenge!


Author's Response: Thanks for responding! I do agree that more is needed with this one and I do intend to elaborate more. The only reason I did not originally go into more detail is because the story that I am holding in my head that contains the "Why" for Umbridge's hate would not fit into the hate emotion and thus would go beyond the single emotion. I invite you to check back in a couple weeks or so to read more when I get the time to go back and add more! Thanks for the fun challenge!

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