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Review:ChaosWednesday says:
Hey, it's Whiskey from the forums!

The first chapter was so short, I thought I might read on :)

I must admit this is my very first Dramione ever. I know, I know - impossible in the world of hp fanfic, but I've just avoided the ship like the plague, so I remained untainted until now, haha. But I'm glad I gave this one a chance!

I enjoyed that you didn't ignore the effects of the war and that a general sadness underlay Hermione's retrn to Hogwarts. Her breaking up with Ron didn't seem forced at all. Grief can both bring people together and let them drift appart, depending on the personality.

Introducing Malfoy's change with Luna's "auras" was a great touch! It's just very...Harry Pottery, you know? These little magical details that define the characters and scenery...Made me smile! (Although you did spell "aura" as "Auror" at some point :p)

I do wonder who in their right mind would make an ex-Death Eater and murderer of the most beloved wizard of all time Head Boy, though. But I suppose you will explain that in due time.

If I could offer you some CC, then it would be to maybe do more "showing" instead of "telling". The story does begin with a bit of an info-dump. Although what you tell is helpful, it doesn't exactly convey emotions that would draw in the reader. Besides, some of these things could be revealed gradually, thus creating suspence and curiosity. Just a thought!

Thanks for the swap!

Author's Response: Thanks for the swap, I really enjoyed your one shot!
I'm glad you gave Dramione a chance, I think they're very well suited. I do love Ronmione too though, hence the amicable break up, I really don't like fics that make him a cheater or violent as he's just so loveable! This was the first bit of fanfiction I ever wrote so reading it back is a little cringey and I can totally accept your CC and completely agree! I do plan on revisiting this story very soon and doing some heavy editing for the earlier chapters so thank you for the feedback.
As for Draco being Head Boy, although it doesn't say so in the story (again, I'll probably change that in editing) I'd like to think that Draco would have written to or visited McGonagall before term started to ask if they would have him back and that Dumbledore's portrait would have convinced McGonagall to give him a chance to prove himself and also give him a bit of a confidence boost in returning to a school full of people who thought very little of him.

Thanks again for the swap!


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