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Review:Jchrissy says:
I have been trying to review this all stinking day and work keeps distracting me. Why I can't quit and just be an HPFF reviewer, I have no idea. Oh. I'd starve to death.

I love that you've started his in a matter of fact sort of way. I'm not sure if you've seen desperate house wives, but it reminds me of the voice overs delivered in that. I really like that you've given us enough information and kept your style consistent, without drowning us. We got a very good feel for Eloise. She's average on a lot of fronts, but it's easy to see that she's average more because she makes herself be. Except for her intelligence of course. There's nothing average about that.

This is random, but I LOVE that you used chrysalis. So many people say cocoon for butterfly and I always want to correct them and inform them that only moths makes cocoons. But I'd feel like a nerd so I never do, haha. So I just had a huge smile when I read that.

To answer your AN, I think Eloise feels very realistic so far! I'm excited to get to learn more about her, and very excited to see where you take this story!

Another novel... you crazy girl :P



Also-- this was, imo, some of your best writing. It felt really clean and polished. Wonderful job!

Author's Response: But I would send you food!

I haven't seen Desperate Housewives, but I'm happy you thought this flowed well. Eloise is definitely trying to make herself average so she goes unnnoticed -- as long as people let her wander about in peace, she's happy.

Haha, well I didn't know only moths made cocoons, but I'll keep that in mind for the future! (I just chrysalis because it sounded prettier, if you really want to know.)

Another novel, I know... And I have exams so I'm not sure how everything will fit, but once July kicks in updates should be more regular :)

Also, your last comment really made me smile, and I'll try to keep that up throughout the story!

&hearts


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