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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey Bethany Iím here with your seventh review!

I really liked your characterisation of Astoria, I tend to see her and Daphne have differing roles when they appear in stories but I think this is one of the best Iíve seen. It seemed to make sense that sheís a flighty one and it must contrast with Dracoís steadiness.

I can imagine the scandal it must have caused with her leaving her husband though, as I always imagined purebloods to have a traditional set of morals with divorce not allowed, and I canít wait to see how their infamous mother reacts to this. Iím glad that you made her be married to a canon character as itís a lot more fun that way and we can place her actions more easily.

The fireplace scene with Theo was really cute too, and I loved Astoriaís reaction to it. I can imagine Astoria being one to profess her love for someone no matter what, and Daphne being the more steady one, and I canít see her saying that she loved Theo any time soon. Theo did seem to be disappointed about her not being able to make it though, so perhaps there is romance on the cards for them.

I noticed one small typo here -ďI hate Apparition,Ēí I think it should be apparation :)

I really liked the relationship youíve created between Daphne and Astoria, as I feel thereís something waiting there to be explored, Iím not really sure what, but it just feels as if thereís something being left unsaid. I may be reading too much into this, itís just Daphneís thoughts about her arenít entirely optimistic and it makes me think that somethingís happened.

Another great chapter and I canít wait to read on :)


Author's Response: Hello there!

Astoria is too much fun to write :P Did you mean Daphne rather than Draco in that first paragraph? I've certainly tried to keep up a kind of contrast between the two sisters, so it's good to know that you enjoyed that!

I too have always imagined wizards to be a bit more traditional over issues like divorce, especially purebloods... As much as possible, I prefer using canon characters- I like all the little connections!

Aww I'm glad you liked Theo- I was a bit worried about getting him right, as well as Daphne and Astoria's scene after that. Again, it's wonderful that the differences between those two characters are coming through. Plenty more Daphne/Theo to come too :P

Ahh thankyou for spotting that typo!

Yeah, Daphne and Astoria have quite a lot of issues which hopefully will be explored a bit more over the next few chapters...
Thanks again for yet another lovely review! It was great to read :)


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