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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey Bethany I'm here with your sixth review!

First of all I have to say that the name of the cafe is uber cool and I just have images of pink hippogriffs dancing through my brain right now!

I really liked how you made a pureblood run a cafe. I always imagined that the female ones wouldn't have a job so I really liked how you changed it. I think the reason why I liked Daphne having that job so much was because you showed how much she really loved and enjoyed every minute and it was so lovely to see someone so passionate about it.

I'm thinking that Daphne likes Theo in a way more than a good friend would, so I'm looking forward to seeing how that develops as everyone loves a bit of romance.

I really loved her observations of everything and it added so much to the scene and showed the little everyday things. It made my heart warm at the mention of the mother looking over her pram at the baby as so many of these things happen in real life yet we miss most of them.

I spotted this little thing here 'She had been part of the war generation-' I think there should be a space between the generation and the - :)

Ooh and the ending was dramatic too with Astoria bursting in and announcing that she had left 'him'. I sensed some tension between the two there with Daphne saying long time no see, I hope the story behind that develops as my curiosty is aroused!

I can't wait to read on :D

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hey there Kiana!

Well it was worth you leaving this review just to hear about the pink hippogriffs dancing in your brain! :P

This story is basically about Daphne's old Pureblood-y life, versus her new cafe-y one, and the conflict between them so it's good to hear that that's coming through a bit so early on! I'm glad that you like her passion for the cafe- I've got pretty attached to it myself having written ten chapters of it!

I lovve the best-friends-fall-in-love trope, so you'll definitely see some Daphne/Theo dynamics later on!

I think I prbably could have written another two thousand words describing the cafe so I'm glad you like the details! I can see it so clearly in my head, and really want to convey it to the reader... :)

Ahh thankyou for that grammar thing! It's great to have such an observant reader :)

Yeah I do love me a bit of cliffhanger :P Astoria's ended up as a pretty major character in this (probably cuz she's so much fun to write), so it's good to hear that that piques your curiosity! I look forward to scrolling up to read your other reviews! :P

-Bethany


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