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Review:nott theodore says:
I'm sitting here trying to think of something to write that isn't full of an excessive amount of exclamations right now, but it's proving difficult. Please bear with me as I try to write a coherent review...

Seriously, I am so impressed with this chapter! I don't know how you manage it, but you make everything seem like it's getting a lot better and more positive for Emily and then BAM! You bring her right back down again and it feels like we've regressed completely. I feel so sorry for her, but it's also such an accurate portrayal of what depression can be like. There are so many ups and downs and that makes it even harder to deal with.

I really loved the opening scenes of this chapter when Emily and Michelle are in Madam Puddifoot's. The idea of two friends going there to try all the cakes is really amusing. I really am so glad that Emily has Michelle as a friend to spend time with doing 'normal' things. At the same time, there's a massive problem with the fact that Michelle knows nothing about her depression. Not that Emily should necessarily have to tell her, but the fact that Emily doesn't really have any friends who she's spoken to about her troubles. Michelle obviously suffered during the war as well, but she has Anthony, whereas poor Emily has been struggling with it all on her own for years.

The glimpses back into Emily's past are really interesting, and I think they're really important to help us understand more about Emily's character and what she has been through. They also draw a stark contrast between what she used to be like and the person she is now. The tiny snippets you include that reference her experiences during the war are almost infuriating with how curious they make me!

I adore your characterisation of McGonagall. She's a strong woman and a strict teacher, but a fiercely loyal and caring person as well. Most headteachers would want to get rid of a teacher like Emily if they knew about their problems, but I don't think she's like that.

There's one tiny mistake I noticed. You missed a speech mark when Michelle was asking Emily to come for dinner, but that's nothing major!

It makes me sad to hear that this story isn't getting a lot of reads, because it's different to what you normally write but also original compared to a lot of what I've read on this site. I hope you update soon!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: I love your reviews, you are always so sweet to me :)

I'm glad you liked the chapter, I was a bit worried that it would be too much of a contrast for people with the sweet girls day out followed by an awful nightmare that causes a violent panic attack, and then to end on that note! I really wanted the reader to feel it, but I thought it might freak some people out.

Most people write Puddifoot's as this awful place because Harry hated it, but I reckon if the coffee's good then I'll go just about anywhere. Plus the service is probably really good :P Emily is very private and the only reason she tells Heather as much as she does is because the whole healer thing makes her feel safe. I think she's also afraid to tell any of this to Michelle because she likes the feeling of having a girlfriend to just hang out with. It makes her feel normal again and she's scared of jeopardising that.

Oh I'm so glad the memories are coming across properly! The way you described them is exactly why I put them in. I'm trying to create two different version of Emily, to show the impact the depression and anxiety and stress has had on her. Plus, it's just fun to write them :)

I am so in love with McGonagall. I mean I already was from the moment I started reading the books, but since I've been delving into her character for this novel, I've just grown to adore her that much more. She's so amazing and I love writing her.

I'm kind of sad I don't get a lot of reads for this because I feel like it's so much better than my next-gen stuff which gets about four or five times the amount of reads as this story. But on the other hand, I love the reviews I get for this story, they're really in-depth and well thought out and are so encouraging, I get so excited when I see a new review :) I definitely prefer quality to quantity!

Thanks again for your review, I look forward to your thoughts every time! :)


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