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Review:nott theodore says:
I think that this is it! This is where Rowena and Helena's relationship goes downhill and becomes completely unsalvageable, right?

I enjoyed the meeting between the founders as they began planning the optional lessons for their students. One of my favourite things about this story is the way you conceptualised the beginning of Hogwarts; I've always wondered what classes they originally began teaching and for how long the founders would actually have taught at the school before recruiting other people to teach and help them run it.

To some extent, I can understand Rowena's desperation to put an end to the engagement, as she sees it as completely the wrong thing for her daughter. But the way she expresses it is sure to cause more problems than it solves; if she had explained her motives to Helena first then perhaps she would be more likely to understand. At the same time, I think she is (or I want her to be) underestimating Venn. I think that he does have some of the family traits, but that he has more humility and kindness to compensate for this.

I thought this line was just perfect: "As the miles between them expanded, the two mothers cried identical sets of tears."

The conversation between Venn and Cepheus was really intriguing. They seem to accept that marriage does not necessarily mean love - a concept which is alien to most of us today. It really highlights the traditions and conventions of the period, and I think that would make Venn even more scared to fall in love. Although I don't really like the pureblood values that were trumpeted at Cepheus' wedding, I think his advice was valuable for Venn.

My only criticism for this chapter would be your characterisation of Godric Gryffindor. I realise that this story focuses much more on the Slytherins and Ravenclaws, but personally I feel that he would oppose Salazar's views just as vehemently, if not more vehemently, than Rowena does. After all, Gryffindor is renowned for being the champion of muggle-borns.

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: I kind of love this chapter. It's interesting to watch Rowena unravel and try to take everyone else down with her--and realize that she's losing.

It's awesome that you like my ideas about Hogwarts' origins! I pictured it being like a Plato's school of sorts, starting out small with friends and family and slowly expanding to become the institution we know and love. It was fun to think about how the elective classes could have come into being.

Rowena doesn't have all the pieces to the puzzle, but she thinks her intelligence means that she knows the right thing to do here. Unfortunately, her concern for Helena has clouded her judgment. She wanted so badly for Helena to grow up, but now that she has, she can't relinquish the reins and allow her little girl to make her own decisions. It's sort of a sad perspective on how little trust Rowena actually has in her own daughter.

Yeah, it's not all about love here. I think Cepheus has some sound advice, and I love the little bromance between him and Venn. It seems like Venn feels more comfortable proceeding with the wedding now that he knows it is possible to be happy as a husband, and that growing up doesn't have to change someone totally.

I've gotten that critique before, and you'll be happy to know that Godric plays a larger role in the chapter I'm currently writing. I agree that he would have more to say about Salazar's radical ideas than he did in this chapter. I hope you like what I do with him in the next chapter--please tell me what you think!

Thanks for your fantastic review :)

-Amanda


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