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Review:nott theodore says:
The conflicts that we have seen simmering below the surface so far in this story are becoming more prominent in this chapter. Despite the fact that I know this story can't really have a happy ending, I still want to see Venn and Helena avoid the tragedy that is inevitable for them.

I thought you portrayed the feelings of both of the mothers brilliantly. Edeline and Rowena have both spent so long trying to encourage their children to conform to social convention and get married, and yet now that their wishes have been granted they are both sorrowful. I guess that these are natural feelings for any mother who is preparing to watch their child 'fly the nest'. I think I'm beginning to sense something darker in Rowena's character, as well. So far in this story (and in most others) Rowena is conveyed as perfect sort of character, and I'm really enjoying seeing that she has flaws just like everyone does.

I think perhaps my favourite part of this chapter was Venn's visit to Hogwarts. I'd never thought that Salazar might have shown or told other people about the Chamber, but he must have done for the legend to continue throughout the years. It's quite sickening to think that Salazar put so much planning and preparation into building the Chamber of Secrets, even to the extent of putting a monster in it that he knew had the power to kill future students. Of course we've all read about the Chamber being opened again, but this really brought its creation to life.

I feel quite a lot of empathy with Helena at the moment, as everything is quite overwhelming for her. This has been a time of her life that she has dreamed of for years, but I suspect that she fill find it a disappointment, and that might contribute to how this novel develops.

Anyway, enough useless waffling from me...onto the next chapter!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: It's great that you've become attached to the characters. I'm quite fond of them myself, and it's going to break my heart to write the ending to this novel.

I really wanted to play up the normalcy of both mothers here. It makes perfect sense to not quite want your only child to grow up, even if it's what needs to happen and you've been pestering them to leave the nest for some time. As for Rowena, it's interesting to hear that she comes across as perfect to you. I tried to paint her as being somewhat reserved, but she's definitely got her moments of judgment and elitism like the rest. She will grow darker in the future.

You should be really disgusted with Salazar at this point, and even more so in the future. I intended for both he and Rowena to become more human and more easily despised in their many flaws. On the other hand, the argument could be made that they only meant to do what was right for their respective families. It'll be interesting to see what you think of them when all is said and done.

I do a lot of cruel things to poor Helena, but I feel for her. It hurts to not feel the support and trust of those you love most, especially during the very pivotal transition to adulthood.

Thanks for another awesome review!

-Amanda


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