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Review:teh tarik says:
This is an amazing chapter. Really, you've gone into so much detail in writing young Bella, her upbringing and the pureblood ideology of her family, the formal stilted relationship with her father, even the state of the wizarding world. This is such a complex chapter; it contains so much information, and the relevant accurate sort of info. There's nothing superfluous and your portrayal and characterisation of Bella is outstanding.

Already, at such a young age, Cygnus has already indoctrinated Bella into the hate-filled anti-Muggle pureblood philosophy. And Bella is just so ardent in upholding these beliefs, and I think part of this is because she respects and adores her father beyond anything and craves his acknowledgement and approval. This is just so Bella, and already we can see the shadow of what she'll become, how she will be so obsessed in obtaining the recognition and favour of Lord Voldemort. Your Bella here is just so wonderfully written and her character has been visualised in so much detail - beneath the rigid framework of beliefs, of stifling pureblood social structure, she's just such a strong, ardent and impassioned force, waiting for the right person to summon and unleash all her destructive power. Am being a little bit dramatic here :P

I also love your characterisation of Cygnus. On the surface he's the typical pureblood father - with an air of great authority, commanding respect from the rest of the family, and yet he comes off as somewhat cold and detached and very very formal. Yet that little glimmer of pride Bella detects about him (perhaps) betrays some sort of special connection with his eldest daughter, at the way she's turned out. And the praise that he bestows on her at the end of the day is not just a careless statement; it's an official stamp of approval that he bestows on Bella. There's that rare moment of connection between father and daughter which is such a powerful scene, especially when you consider how starved for affection Bella is. Well, I'm probably misinterpreting the whole story :P

Anyway, lovely writing, Jami :) This is such a great story and I do hope you update it soon. I'm so glad to have the chance to read more of your lovely works ^.^


Author's Response: Okay, I tried to get it together a bit better for this response so hopefully I can give you something relatively intelligent, haha.

Showing Bellatrix from a young girl is one of the biggest things that I was excited about when starting this story. I think she'd have always had something wrong with her. Not as out of touch as she is in present day, but I think her mental warping started at a very early age.

Yes, you're exactly right with her needs to please her father. She doesn't care what he's talking about, whatever he's saying is as good as set in stone for her. He's a person that will never give full approval, nothing close to it, which is what makes Bellatrix desire it so much.

I am totally happy with you wanting to be dramatic in your reviews. It just makes me sit here like a happy little writer and smile like a freak, haha. But your correct with your comments about setting Bellatrix up for what she'll become one day. This poor thing never had a chance, really.

No! You aren't misinterpreting at all! Cygnus was, in my mind, a man that could care less about his children. He didn't care that he didn't have sons, he didn't care what they did, all he cared about was that they acted accordingly and followed is Orders. He understands the way Bella looks up to him, and because of that takes this time to remind her of what is meant of her. The fact that he's doing it himself instead of just delegating the task to their mother is already a huge deal, and Bellatrix is more than honored to have this attention from her father.

You've definitely hit on everything I was hoping to convey in the start of this story. And you've made me so excited to write chapter three, haha!

I'm sorry I can't give you a more deserving response to these awesome reviews. You've just left me speechless ♥ and that's hard to do. Ask my fiance ;)!


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