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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for review tag, and also to review your entry for my challenge. (I hope you don't mind me combining the two reviews).

This was such a beautifully written one-shot. I absolutely loved it. I think you portrayed Bill and Fleur's "old" years very well. I felt so sad for Bill, to see how Fleur had "lost herself". The way you wrote him, of how everyone flocked to him, how he was so kind and patient, and how much he still loved his wife, it was all really sweet.

I liked the descriptions of their past life as well - all the little details about Fleur fighting off the death eaters, of their firstborn, of Molly Weasley's funeral, of chopping off Bill's hair, and especially of how Fleur began starting to forget small things.

The little french phrase was a very nice touch as well, and the way you ended the story with it was very sweet and touching. I think you really did an awesome job portraying Bill and Fleur's love, and Fleur's fierceness and Bill's kindness. It was all really well done.

The ending was truly sad in a sense - it was tragic how Fleur wasn't herself anymore - and yet so captivating.

Apart from a few grammar errors and such, this was pretty good, and made for a smooth read. Great job!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

P.S. Thanks for participating in my challenge, the results should be out in a few days.

Author's Response: Hello! :)

Thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review! I really loved writing this one-shot and imagining how Bill and Fleur would have aged in a realistic way. I felt so sad for Bill as well, but I know that since he's such a great, loving guy that he would still be there for Fleur no matter what.

It's great to hear that you liked the references to the past! I tried to pick events that would have been important and significant, but also little details of their everyday life. I'm glad you thought the French phrase worked- I was a bit concerned that it was a bit too mushy, but then came to terms with the fact that this story really needed to be a bit, well, mushy. :)

Thank you so much for making this challenge!!! I knew I wanted to write a story of an aged couple, but you assigning me this pairing really fit well and gave the idea life. Having a challenge to write for definitely inspired me, and I really appreciate that! :)

Thank you for this lovely review!!!



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