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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey Aisha Iím here with your first of five reviews :D

I really liked how you showed that Professor Peachís death didnít just affect James and the teachers, but the students too. It was really great that you chose to dwell on in to so much in this chapter as we really got a sense of what a profound impact it must have made on them, and how they didnít really know what was going on at all. I think the addition of Aurors being there definitely added to that sense of scariness.

The way James was so affected by it was also great, as I can imagine finding a corpse must have been one of the most traumatic times in his life. His actions and thoughts were perfectly succinct, which I find is another thing people often forget to do once a death has occurred. I felt bad for James as he seemed to be searching and searching yet not finding any answers. You could sense his aggravation about it when talking to Sirius.

The conversation between him and McGonagall was also great, and you could tell how Peach had affected both of them so much. It seemed fitting that he and McGonagall would be close enough to have that conversation, as I always imagined that McGonagall would have had a soft spot for him. I also liked as we got to learn more about her background which was really useful as we could place her character into context.

I donít know what your Dumbledore was like before Jami helped you, but either way he was great, and it was so him to let James go and investigate the murder in not so legal ways :P I really liked the last bit where you showed the Aurors as it reinforced that this was a murder mystery first and foremost and one can never really predict what will happen in them.

A great chapter, and I canít wait to read on :D

-Kiana

Author's Response: Hey Kiana!

When I was writing this chapter, I was thinking about what it would be like if my English teacher (she's a really great teacher and a really great person too) was murdered. I couldn't gloss over the Professor's death as it wouldn't be realistic and especially with this story, I want my readers to feel as if this could have happened. Aurors or any authoritative figure have that ability to instil a sense of security and a sense of fear at the same time, which is unique to their positions.

I would be terrified if I found a dead body of someone I knew, and James, despite all the bravado that he might put up, is still a teenage boy. James is naturally inquisitive, and in my mind, he's every part the detective. When he can't find any answers to a case that's personal to him, well...

Even though McGonagall always has to tell the Marauders off because of their bad behaviour and whatnot, she definitely still has a soft spot for them and they for her. She never changes and has this fire within her that the four boys admire. The conversation between James and McGonagall is certainly one of my favourite conversations to write because they are both out of character- James is more mellow and McGonagall's guard has slipped and we see more about them because of this.

My Dumbledore before Jami was a little less vague and Dumbledore-ish :P Dumbledore doesn't follow the Ministry or their laws, he's separate from them, above them even and boy does he know it! I couldn't resist the ending, I just couldn't ;) I had to add a bit of mystery to the grief.

Thanks for the review :D


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