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Review:adluvshp says:
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Well, this certainly seems like an interesting story. I like your plot idea of Viktor still not having let go of Hermione, and feeling 'depressed' and angry at her wedding. I hope this 'Amy' is a good person and can help him heal =) From the story summary, she sounds like an interesting OC as well.

I liked your characterisation of Viktor. It was tied with canon in a way which was good. His brooding attitude was well-portrayed. I also liked the idea of him being a pureblood and his parents never having cared for him. It made me feel sorry for him how he had never truly experience love, so I hope things get better for him.

You have some typos, like sometimes you refer to Krum as "her" in your sentences. There were a couple of other grammar/sentence-phrasing errors as well. You could perhaps get a beta, or read through thoroughly to fix them. The lesser errors, the smoother the read, after all! Another small CC I'd give you is to break up some of your big paragraphs into smaller ones to ease the flow.

Anyhow, I enjoyed this chapter, and it set the scene well for the rest of the story. Do continue the story.

Good job!
8/10
Cheers
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hi! I'm glad you felt sorry for Viktor. =[ Poor guy, he really did like Hermione a lot. Even in GoF. But let's see what Amy does to him. =] She is quite interesting for me to write as well, as she matches my own personality very much.
Characterizing Viktor and keeping him canon was hard, so that's a real big compliment for me. Thank you! His personality shows that he's not loved or cared i think...
Did I do that mistake? *blushes* Oh my god, I can't figure out how I did such a thing. ;) Anyways thanks for pointing out, will definitely correct it.
I've got this chapter beta read now, so I'll revise it and edit soon. =] I'll definitely continue this.

Thanks a lot for taking time to read this!


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