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Review:WeasleyTwins says:
Hello Amanda!

What another wonderful chapter! Your dialogue is impeccable. I love that old world feel of the dialogue and the description. Their speech is formal and thus fitting for their stations. I like that Salazar seems to be a wealthy, nobleman. It seems very appropriate for what little information we get in canon about him.

I only have one small suggestion. The line of dialogue, "I have received adequate rest," while formal, seemed very stilted to me. The rest of the dialogue is wonderful, but there's something about this line that just didn't sit right with the other dialogue and description.

Other than that little piece, I thought everything else was sublime. I am supremely jealous of your writing abilities! I can't wait to continue with the story!

Shelby

Author's Response: The dialogue was tough, but I've gotten a lot of compliments on it and I'm pleased to hear that you like it as well. As for that line you mentioned, I seem to recall not exactly liking the way it came out when I wrote it. I'll have to go back and see if I can find a smoother way to say that and still keep the same tone.

Keep your eye on Salazar--he's going to be a major part of the story, even if the plot doesn't focus directly on the Founders themselves in many places.

Thanks for another fabulous review :)

-Amanda


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