Wow, it's been a long time since I've reviewed this story! :)
I do like this chapter a lot, because I feel like it's just one of those chapters where a whole lot happens, but at the same time, it's not made into a huge deal either. Does that even make sense? Probably not, but oh well.
I really like the parallel you developed between Thalia and Sirius here, in that both end up standing up to their parents, even if Thalia's wasn't quite as dramatic as Sirius's, but I don't imagine it was actually meant that way either.
If I didn't like Thalia's mother before, I certainly don't now. She embodies all the traits of the arrogant purebloods, and just kind of gives off an air of superiority, which I'm sure was your intention. :)
THE KISS. Part of me was expecting something like that to happen, but you did an excellent job of placing it at a different spot than normal, because I did find myself surprised when it actually happened, thinking "Where did that come from?" Definitely a good thing. :)
I like how Pettigrew's shown as a nice kid here, because I truly believe he wouldn't have been friends with the Marauders if he wasn't. I like how you briefly threw in the backstory with his dad, because it kind of explains why Peter is the way that he is, all timid and scared.
Mrs. Potter is adorable, just like one of those mothers that always has cookies ready and it always happy. It creates a nice contrast between Thalia's mother and her.
I really do like the way that you describe George and Thalia's relationship, because she does seem to be interested in him, but in reading about her visit, the one word I come up with for their relationship is "nice." So it's not one of those crazy romances, but it's still cute nonetheless.
Although I'm still pulling for Thalia/Sirius.
Anyways, there really wasn't much here for me to critique on, because there wasn't much that I saw wrong with this chapter! The flow was great, the descriptions beautiful, etc., etc.
Overall, definitely still love reviewing this story! Feel free to re-request for future chapters! :)
Author's Response: Ah this review so long and brilliant, I'll do my best to address all the points in it :D
Haha it does make sense, as I guess it starts off vaguely normal and then interesting things happen! I'm glad that you liked the parrallels between the two, as I thought it would make sense that it would happen.
Yeah Thalia's mother's a tricky one, you will find out a lot more about her much later on. I think that's part of the reason why Thalia's exit was less extreme, as she still loves her, unlike Sirius and his parents.
I'm so glad that you liked the kiss! I was really worried it would be cliche having it at all ball and all of that, but I'm glad that you found it wasn't!
I've been a little mean to Pettigrew throughout this, so I felt that I needed that scene to make up for it. I also wanted to show why he was the quieter, and perhaps weaker one, as I do believe there was a reason.
I think 'nice' is the perfect word to describe those two, because though she does like him, there's that part of her which is unsure. I'm still pulling for those two too, and it pained me to make Thalia run away like that!
I'm so glad that you liked this chapter, and I will definitely be back to re-request! Thank you for this great review :D