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Review:Lululuna says:
Review tag!!! :D

Okay, so first of all your summary sounds really exciting! I'm really excited to read about when she gets to Egypt, but I think this chapter on it's own is a very strong start and did an amazing job of introducing the characters and the context. You smoothly integrated Rose's personality and employment while adding in useful bits of information about the rest of the Weasleys and the world that Rose exists in.

I really love how Molly is a librarian and a Squib- for some reason this tiny detail just interested me so much. It makes sense that in the Weasley clan there would be at least one Squib, and that not everybody would be a golden overachiever. I felt like this brief mention of Molly, and the fact that she and Rose were close, gave me an instant idea of both their personalities.

Also, I loved the idea of Ginny taking the staff out for drinks. It was definitely the kind of generous action she would display, but also left me with the impression that Rose has to share Ginny with the rest of the staff, if that makes sense haha, but it was a subtle way to hint at the family dynamic within the staff of the Prophet.

I love reading stories that are set in different locations, and this one seems very promising. Of course I'm also interested to learn about what Scorpius is doing in Egypt, and what Rose's relationship with him entails! Overall I think this was a great start to your story-- I can already tell that I really like the clarity of your writing style. I'm looking forward to reading more of it. :)

Author's Response: Hey there!

Ah, I can't tell you how glad I am that you like my summary as I thought it was terrrible! Yay! And I had a strong first chapter, as this really gave me a lot of grief and I was so worried that it was a boring introductory one, so I can't describe how glad I am to see that's not the case :D

I thought it would be fun to include, and Molly just screamed squib to me. I agree, that even in the Weasley family there are bound to be squibs. They always seem to be too perfect in next gen stories so I think that's why I made Molly and Rose how they are.

Yeah, Rose has a lots of issues with her family and I'm glad you picked up that bit about Ginny. She always seems to be overshadowed by them wherever she goes.

I loved writing in different locations too, as it's way more fun and I've always loved Egypt so I almost can't believe I haven't written a story set here before! Eek, I can't thank you enough for this review as it's calmed a lot my fears so thank you so much!

-Kiana


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