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Review:nott theodore says:
I've been meaning to come and read something of yours for a while but I only just got a bit of spare time to take a look at this.

This was such a cute one-shot! I thought you characterised Teddy perfectly, especially with the way that he refuses to move unless he gets his way. I also thought you got across the simplicity of his thinking (the way that all children think) really well. His fear that nobody will want him anymore once the new baby is born is so silly but yet so real and terrifying for him.

I also love the idea of the tree-house, especially with the little anecdote about how it was made and how Ron fell out of it (to be honest, it seems like something he would do!). The way the children have made a game of the enchantments seems very believable. The 'no-girls' rule is definitely one I can imagine being implemented. It's quite funny when you look at the way he reacts to seeing Victoire there contrasted with the end section.

I think the only criticism I would make is that some of Victoire's speech seems a little too mature for her. She must be younger than Teddy and I'm not sure if she would have known everything about how Harry's parents died, but I do think that as the oldest child in such a big family, she would be quite thoughtful and probably more mature than you'd expect.

The end section was a really nice way to round off the one-shot, and I enjoyed Louis' behaviour which is similar to Teddy's in the beginning, whereas Teddy has come to be grateful for the fact he isn't a Weasley.

I really enjoyed this and I'm glad I came to read it!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: Hi there! Thanks for stopping by :)

Awh, I'm so glad you liked my first attempt at fanfic :D Teddy is definitely one of my favourite characters from HP, and I feel quite sorry for him in many ways. I can totally empathise with the fact he thinks he might kicked out, because I felt like that quite a lot as a child - not accepted. I am kinda kid inside, so it was quite to write like one!

I always dreamt of a tree house when I was little, and I thought about how such a caring worried mum like Hermione would definitely be concerned about the health and safety side of a tree house. I also think that clumsy Ron would probably fall out! The whole girls and boys problem is always with children of that age, and how boys are prejudice against girls because of their gender, e.t.c.

Yeah, good point! Victoire might not neccesarily know about the whole Ginny - Harry thing, let alone realize how Harry really wanted to be a weasley. I might go back and edit it!

I'm pleased you liked the ending - I wanted it to be satisfying for the reader, and to feel like they properly left it feeling resolved that Teddy's proud to be a lupin.

Thank you so much for reviewing - such a long review too! Eeekk I'm so glad you liked it!! You're awesome for reviewing, thank you :D


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