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Review:slytherinchica08 says:
Oh my gosh! This chapter was just so heartbreaking. That opening paragraph though, was so catchy and really pulls the reader in, or at least it did me. I like that it was her dream in a way telling her what is going on with her even if the actual events of the dream are slightly different from what actually happened to her. The family reactions I think were spot on. Everyone was clearly upset and I can imagine that even though the family has had some time to come to terms with the news that it would still be hard for them to try to tell her what is going on. Dom's reaction at the end was spot on as well. I can imagine that she would be scared and hurt enough that she would say those things to Teddy and even though she really doesn't want to hurt him, she just wants him to understand how much she thinks her life is ruined and how things have changed for her and that she's not the same person that she used to be because of this run in. I would say the only thing that seemed out of place for me was her calling her parents by name. I don't really know many people that do call their parents by name, even as they do get older so it just struck me as something kind of out of place. Also is there no Louis in this story? I noticed that you didn't mention him being there so I wasn't sure if he just wasn't present at that time or if he's just not going to be mentioned in the story. Anyways this was another great chapter! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Yes, it was quite sad wasn't it? Poor Dom. I am pleased you liked the opening paragraph, I struggled with writing it. Dreams can sometimes be a distorted reflection of something that happened which is what I wanted to convey. I am glad you liked the family reactions, as well as Dom's at the end. Indeed, she is very scared and hurt and just a mess, which is why she lashed out at Teddy. Oh I didn't realise that I had her calling her parents by their names. I'll rectify that. Um well I didn't exactly keep Louis in mind while writing this, but I am thinking of perhaps including him in future chapters if I can find a good explanation for his absence until now (since "I forgot about him" doesn't seem quite right) xP Thank you for your lovely review!

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