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Review:nott theodore says:
First, I want to say thanks for the update because I've missed reading this story (I still didn't have to wait that long though!) and congratulations on getting so many views!

I enjoyed reading this chapter for Sirius' POV because we haven't seen things from his perspective for a while, and I think you manage to get his voice to sound more mature in this narrative than a lot of the other characters that you write from, which is obviously a good thing since they're much younger!

I really enjoy these characters, especially seeing the friendship between James and Sirius. Fred is possibly my favourite character in this story - he just cracks me up all the time!

It was really interesting to see Sirius having to take polyjuice potion to act as Neville and try and convince Harry. I'm sure that there must have been an easier way of doing that, but I can totally understand why Sirius found it so hard. The Umbridge thing was a big slip-up, and something I had been wondering was about Teddy's age, so I'm glad this cleared it up. I'm surprised that Harry hasn't started suspecting something - although perhaps he has, and is keeping it quiet.

Although at the moment it seems that the case with the pureblood attacks has cleared up, I'm pretty sure that there's more to come from that. I hope so, anyway, because I want to know what Sirius was doing with the werewolves and also who did it. I think perhaps it would be good if you could include some more information about what happened in the actual attacks when you're writing from Sirius or Neville's POV, since I imagine they both know about it. Maybe you could even use Teddy for that, as since he's in auror training he could have access to that sort of information.

I'm still not entirely sure how I feel about Lowsley. It's not just that he's got his favourites and is quite arrogant, but I get the feeling that there's something else below the surface there that we have yet to find out. Maybe...is he related to the pureblood attacks in some way?

Also, James and Amelia? I saw that one coming! I knew it! *gives self-congratulatory pat on the back*

I noticed a few spelling and grammar mistakes in this chapter, for example "he didn't completely by it" should be "buy it". Other than that, another great chapter. Well done, and I look forward to the next update!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: It was a while on my part and I did it again. I'm really sorry. :( I have a chapter pending right now and it should be up in the next day or two! I miss Sirius' POV as well, but there isn't much going on with him right now and I have to give it to other characters sometimes. I'm glad he sounded more mature and I also try to make him sound that way too. He has his childish moments, but overall he's more mature than he use to be and does have a better perspective on things.
Yes, there probably was an easier way for Sirius, Neville and Harry to meet and exchange notes. However, Harry is crunched on time and Neville had to come up with a solution fast.
I'm glad you mentioned Harry. Not a lot of people have, but I would just keep an eye on him. I'm not saying that he does or doesn't suspect something, but there was a big clue in this chapter, that Neville was in fact Sirius because Sirius made another slip-up beside not knowing who Umbridge was.
There will be more on the pureblood case later, but Harry was more concerned about clearing the werewolves, but more on that next chapter. But you are right to think of Teddy. More information of the case will be relieved later though.
Honestly, i'm not sure how I feel about Lowsley either. He's difficult for me to write, so most of my feelings for him stem from that...But I like your thinking. It might be something like that or something else.
Congrats! *gives you congratulatory pat on the back, as well* xD
I'm in the middle of grammar updates and this is on the list. Haha, but that you and if I had money I would hire you to correct it, because sometimes I miss things after reading it so much.

Thank you again!
Taz


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