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Review:nott theodore says:
Uncle Jack! *waves* (also, why not name a character after yourself?)

I'm really pleased you managed to drag yourself away from the cat pictures for long enough to find time to write this :P

I'm not really sure why you worry about writing the girl characters, because I thought you got Charlotte's thought process pretty well here. Nothing is simple with us! So she's got boy problems and feeling jealous of Lily at the same time because she feels like she's being replaced by her as Ellie's best friend and somewhere behind all that there's probably some school stuff since she's Head Girl and seventh year and what-not. Pretty complicated, but if it was simple then that would make life too easy, right?

Favourite line: "Hello there, Hope. Are you here to fill me with your pleasantries?"

I felt for Leo here. Just as he thinks he might have a chance with Charlotte again, he learns that she's gone and got back together with Anthony. Oh dear, these people are hopeless! Well, he's going to have to pull his finger out and actually do something about it if he wants to get her. That seems a strangely grown up requirement for the kid, but I'm going to believe he can do it.

So, questions...

The first time I read these questions I thought you meant comeback as in when a band get back together *slaps forehead* oh...you mean Lily's responses! (I might be having a slow day today, feel free to judge) She gets brilliant comebacks. Although I don't think I'd like to be banished into the icy pits by her...to tell you the truth, she kind of scares me. I think if I knew her in real life I'd probably avoid her, like the true Gryffie I am!

The mention of Scorpius and Leo's 'bromance' cracked me up. I didn't miss Albus until you mentioned him, so I'm not entirely sure what that means...it would be good to see some more of him in the next few chapters to build up for the sequel though.

The metaphor...like I said, I'm having a slow day but I think that it must be something quite deep. What I got from it was that you have to take risks and delve beneath the surface otherwise you'll miss out on a lot without knowing what you're missing out on (hint Ellie hint Charlotte hint!). Pretty deep stuff from that kid!

I'd like to see some more Albus in the next chapter and maybe some Rose/Scorpius too. I'll look forward to the next update!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: Oh...why did I put myself in? I wrote this really early in the morning (don't tell anyone), so that may have added to my insanity.

Girl complexities, you don't even want to know how frustrated I got with Charlotte. I would read a section of what I wrote, decide there wasn't enough, and add even more. I salute women and their minds, but I'm glad I got it right :P

Leo will get around to doing something...probably. I like to torture these characters, don't I? Oh well, there are resolutions in this next chapter! My readers will be happy soon enough.

Ha, I don't judge you, no worries. I should have worded that better...right. Lily is just a sassy bag of fun, but I would want to be her friend. She's kind of freakishly loyal, isn't she?

Oh the metaphor...I just pointed it out so that you guys would understand the next few chapters as I try to patch up Chleo. It makes reference to other parts of the novel, just as a fun tidbit of information.

Oooo, a lot of people like ScoRose, eh? That's awesome! I'm a fan of them too :)

soapman333


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