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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Gah, this chapter was so full of awesomeness! You managed to pack humour, action, developing friendships and relationships and fluffiness all into one chapter - HOW do you do it?

I think my favourite part about this chapter was the fact that Sirius' story was told through a flashback rather than just he and Lily telling the story. It was definitely an effective way for us to see his secret. I'm not quite sure what I had expected this secret to be, but it definitely wasn't that! The way you wrote the scene was spectacular and I loved how you linked it into the dream at the beginning.

There were a lot of other bits and pieces I loved about this chapter, like the fact that you included Severus and that some more minor characters, such as Mary MacDonald were introduced. I'm also glad you included that little Quidditch segment because for me, Quidditch has always been an important part of Hogwarts life and of James' life, too.

Ooh, a bit of a cliffhanger at the end! My imagination is now on overdrive, wondering what McGonagall has to say...

Courtney:)

Author's Response: I think a lot of people thought his secret was going to revolve around something romantic, so it was fun to reveal the truth. Mwahaha. You liked the flashback?? Oh good! I was worried I made it too.. confusing. I'm actually a huge fan of motorcycles, so I was afraid I may have gotten a bit too into describing it, haha.

Severus. Oh gosh Severus. I'm not a fan of his but I do try and do him justice in this and not make him... you know, overly bad because of my own biases haha. I'm excited that you liked seeing him and Mary in here though, it makes writing his pain in the butt self worth it, haha!

Thank you again for all your amazing comments. I know this isn't a short story, and the fact that you've started it and (seem) to be liking it is such a huge treat.

Thank you ♥

Jami



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