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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello there I'm here with your fourth out of eight reviews :D

Wub Alexa was adorable. I just want hug her cuteness. I think it was really great that you made her like that, as it contrasted so much with the griminess and not so nice parts of Sirius. I think the cutest thing was when she was spelling out the words as she couldn't say them, aw it was adorable.

She really showed how innocent children are, as despited knowing about stranger danger she still wanted to help Sirius and do the right thing for him, and it was lovely.

One slight geographical thing. I thought Azkaban was in the North Sea, so it seemed a little odd to me that he had been to Exeter, because isn't that in Cornwall?

It almost seemed as if she was using Sirius to replace her dad who wasn't there. I thought it was really touching, and it warmed my heart to see that someone as damaged as him, could still make a difference to people's lives, and that must have done him some good too.

Aw the ending was lovely! I almost thought that Alexa's dad wasn't coming back from the way she was running out to Sirius with such urgency, and I was getting all sad for her as her dad wasn't coming back, and Sirius left. Then to find out her dad was coming back after all made it so much better.

I thought it was fitting that he didn't say goodbye to her, and she just saw him on the news as it seemed to have more of an effect, and she would always be left with the fact he helped her:D

This was such a lovely one-shot!

-Kiana

Author's Response: I did type a response to this but it seems to have vanished :/

Anyway, hello!
I'm glad you liked Alexa- I really love (attempting) to write from the POV of children, but I found it challenging sometimes too, so it's good to know that you liked her! The sounding out words came about when I was trying to make that kind of vocabulary sound realistic in the mouth of a six-year-old :P
In the books, we so often see Sirius being feared or despised, so I wanted to explore what would happen if he met a character without any of those prejudices... And hopefully they do each other some good too!

Oops yeah- geography was never my strong point! :/ Sort of forgot where Azkaban was- I'll go and edit it!

So pleased that you liked the ending- I nearly did try and write and farewell scene between, but I'm glad to know that it works well without one! I think if there'd been one it would all have all been a bit too neatly tied up...

Thanks again for such a lovely review! I really did enjoy reading it! :)

-Bethany


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