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Review:HandofGlory says:
Ah, so you are Astoria Greengrass. Was her father a Death Eater? I guess it never said yes or no in the books.

It's an ok chapter. It doesn't seem that this chapter had a lot of the main plot in it, just Astoria talking about Summer and meeting her friends at the train. Although Draco getting blood on her leads me to wonder if Astoria will get curious about what is going on.

More suspense!

Author's Response: Hello again!

Yes, it is Astoria, and for the purposes of this story her father was the Death Eater Yaxley, though she goes by her mother's last name. Confusing, I know :P

Ah, I totally agree about the suspense or lack thereof. I had a lot of trouble figuring out how to set up the context and continue the tension of the prologue, since this chapter pretty much jumps back in time by a year and a half. The excitement picks up more in the later chapters I think, which is something I'll be working on.

Thank you for your review :)


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