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Review:ChaosWednesday says:
hey, it Whiskey from Review Tag!

Well, I love me some dark angsty stuff, so this was right up my alley :) To my enjoyment, it was also wonderfully written and structured!

I thoroughly enjoyed the connection you made between the rocking chair and the memory of the swing. Then, immediately, the words "Come with me" took on a new meaning, simply through the visuals you created of him rocking back and forth in anguish while mentally soaring in an idealized memory with a dead girl. I really liked the first part of the story, probably more than the second.

If I were to offer any advice (although this is all a matter of personal opinion), then I would say that the effect of the story would be stronger if you elave out the very last few sentences. What he is about to do is actually quite clear from the start. The sense of uncertainty an "open" end would leave might add instead of subtract from the desperation and unease of tone you have created. Convincing the reader that he has no other way out can be even more disturbing than showing them what he does, you know what I mean?
Just a thought...

Loved this one-shot, I can really see why you won the challenge :)
See you in the forums!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing.

Hi-five! I love dark angst stuff too. I am pleased you found this well-written and structured, thanks.

I wanted to establish a connection between Draco's present and past instead of straightaway jumping into the memory randomly, so I thought of the rocking chair, glad you liked that. Haha you make it sound a lot more awesome than the scene actually was, but thank you. I am pleased you liked the whole imagery that I tried to bring in, and the entire first part.

Thank you for your kind advice. I'll take it into consideration, and perhaps one day when I come back to this story and wish to edit it, I'll definitely think about what you suggested. Right now though, I am pretty content with the way it is =)

Thank you so much for all your lovely words, and advice though. I am flattered *blush*


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