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Review:nott theodore says:
Even though I expected that James would be playing in the match against the Bats (which I'm really looking forward to), it was great to see that Sinead picked him over Roxanne. James' humble opinion of his own abilities was really sweet and I've warmed to him even more seeing that, because I think the best sportsmen and women are humble about their talents. Thinking about it, it's probably even harder for two cousins competing against each other for the same spot on the same team than it would be for them to play a match against each other. I really like the way you write their relationship and everything generally to do with quidditch.

The conversation between James and Roxanne was really interesting. It's good to get another insight into Fred's trouble with relationships and to see it from someone who has a similar perspective. Another thing I found fascinating was the discussion about the effect the war has had on all of the elder Weasleys. I've always thought that it must be devastating for George, but I enjoyed the way you included the other siblings in the discussion as well. I think it will be good for James to realise that as much trouble as he had with his relationship with his parents, they weren't as damaged as the others and did their best to protect their children from the effects of the war.

I also really enjoy the way you weave bits of Carla and James into the story while other things are happening, and the way that Carlotta is gradually learning more about the magical world.

I'll look forward to the match next chapter!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: For all James' faults, he's never been big-headed. It's partly because of his hang-ups over Harry's fame - because if you think your progress is down to your famous dad, you're naturally not going to be too cocky! - and partly because there's no way that Ginny would let him become overly confident anyway. He was always going to make the team because this is his story and I couldn't possibly bring myself to leave him on the bench for the last match of the season ;) but Roxanne had a good chance. I can't remember why I originally decided to make her a pro player as well, but I do like the way their familial relationship affects the way they view each other as teammates.

Roxanne's input here was to show that Freddie's not being completely irrational. It just so happens that Roxanne's able to separate her upbringing and family life from her own personal attributes, whereas Freddie's still concerned that the former affects the latter to a point that he can't rectify. The mention of the other siblings was deliberate because I didn't want it to seem as though George was inexplicably the only one languishing in guilt still, but at the same time he is more damaged than, say, Ginny. So yes, James is in fact very lucky - imagine how he might have ended up if his parents were still grieving like Freddie's! It almost doesn't bear thinking about. I'm glad you liked that part in particular :) Thanks for reviewing!


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