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Review:potterfan310 says:
I wondered where this had gone, but I'm glad it's back!!!

I LOVE Seraphina, she's awkward, determined and head strong and I really like that's she head girl and has never done drinking/parties before.

Albus is really nice and I really do hope she tells him soon. I think he'll make a really good dad and I hope he and Phina will get together. Because who doesn't love a happy ending. :)

CC -
Britpicking - There were a few things you mentioned such as the couch, cot and making out that are American terms that can be easily changed to the British versions.

Backstory - I think you said before there is more of Phina's homelife in later chapters

It'll be intresting to see how Phina's mother reacts especially if Phina says its her fault for telling her to go to a party.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph xx :)

Author's Response: OH MY GOSH HELLO AGAIN! IM SO GLAD YOU FOUND YOUR WAY BACK!

Okay, anyway, moving on from my excitedness (and if that's not a word it just became one).

I always find it unrealistic how a lot of fanfictions have these characters that dunk all the time. I don't really understand why there's always alcohol (which sounds hypocritical considering this chapter but it was important for the story!) There are teenagers that exist who haven't gotten drunk in their life.

I'm not entirely sure how everyone will feel about the ending but I can tell you that there's going to be a sequel (and maybe a final book after that) so there's always that to look forward to!

Thank you for the Britpicking! I was hoping someone would point out any stuff that I could change! I'll get right on fixing that!

There will indeed be more backstory as more chapters are produced!

I had the scene where Phina tells her mother all written out but I lost it so I'll have to rewrite it again!

Anyway, thanks for reviewing!


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