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Review:CherryBoom says:
Hi! I'm here for your requested review. =)

It was a very haunting & beautiful one-shot. I liked the way you varied the story with a current moment and flashbacks. Usually the flashbacks can be bit distracting, but in this case, they made the whole story rather bitter sweet.

Descriptions were excellent, the girl's natural sweetness compared to her gruesome fate really made a difference here. It would be nice to read a sequel for it, since it left me with quite many questions. Like did he ever revenge her fate? Or did he just accept it, and move on?

The flow was really nice, and the way you started by comparing their relationship to colliding planets intrigued me.

His anonymity kind of puzzles me. Since she didn't use his name even when she said she loved him, I'm not sure if she ever understood the danger she was in, or if she even really knew his name. Probably not, since she was a muggle.

His aunt does give Bellatrix run for her money. Then again she might very well be one of the lesser Malfoys or the Blacks. Those families have produced so many loonies throughout the years, that the aunt would fit right in. Considering that they were clearly quite respected family, since Voldy himself bothered to stop by, and the mansion they had indicates the wealth, maybe my guess is not so far from the truth?

I enjoyed this one-shot, and could have read more of it. But then again maybe it's better this way, since it was the incredibly sad story.

If you've questions about my review, you can PM on the forums. Other than that, happy writing! =)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I really wanted the anonymity because it was less about him as it was about Jayme. WHEEE! I am so glad you liked the aunt, she was my favourite! I am so glad you liked it, thanks for the review! :)

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