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Review:Lululuna says:
Hello, back to review the second chapter of your lovely and exciting story!

I'm really enjoying the domesticity of the Noble and Most Ancient... you get the idea. Besides the fact that many of their greatest ambitions are to be great and powerful, they come across as relatively youthful and ordinary, worrying about school and social life, which I think is what you're going for.

I really, really love how ordinary Bellatrix in particular is: I think it will make her transformation into the Bella of the HP books a lot more exciting and dramatic.

It was so funny how instead of being angry that her son has pictures of women exposing themselves, Walburga is mad that Sirius has Muggle pictures. Like, would it be better if the women were moving, Walburga? haha.

I enjoyed Bellatrix's story about duelling Travers to get the dark mark, but also how she wouldn't exactly tell Ambrosia what being a DE means in so many words. I wonder how Ambrosia would react if Bella just said "you have to torture and kill people" ? It shows the censorship and brainwashing that goes into it.

You've done an amazing job of portraying these girls like normal graduates eager to prove themselves, without truly realizing what they're getting themselves in to. This really is written so incredibly well, and I'm really enjoying the story!! :)

Author's Response: To answer for Walburga: Yes. Yes, it would, haha.

Thank you for a second lovely review, and an entertaining one at that!

As for the girls not knowing what they're getting into, I feel like there aren't a great many death eaters that really do... with the possible exception of the stereotypically bloodthirsty ones like Macnair. People can conceptualize violence without having ever seen it, and become desensitized to it that way. Voldemort, I think, would have used that to make sure that as few people as possible backed out, and coupled it with that "for the greater good" goal of subjugating Muggle-borns and chasing after power. Censorship with a purpose, as it were.

I plan to follow Bellatrix in particular especially closely; her transformation is definitely the most dramatic and tragic, and that's another reason why I've taken such pains to make the sisters seem as similar as possible, at least initially.

-Warrior


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