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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi there m’dear!

I’m going to start off by saying that I’m not entirely sure what’s going on, but I think that’s expected for a chapter like this.

I love the intensity you’ve drilled into the start of this. Marianne seems like an interesting character, and I’m curious how she will fit into everything. I have to say those first few paragraphs, despite the fact that they’re short, probably were my favorite part of this chapter. I loved the old feel to it and think it started us off really well.

A few things about that - on your first sentence, you don’t need the colon. Not the colon and the period. Then with, ““You are Germany Marianne, because you keep..” I would consider putting a comma after ‘Germany’ and changing it to, “You are Germany, Marianne. You keep...” to give it less of a jumbled feel.

I’m so happy that the woman wasn’t Hermione, and was really impressed with the information you were able to pass through us from him. We learned that this woman knows that Muggles are in danger, extreme danger, and that she’s in danger too simply because of her boyfriend and the company he seems to keep.

I like that you made Pansy very complex even in such a small amount of time. She’s going to stay with this person who is hurting her, but is also informing someone of the danger that’s about to occur. Whether she was planning on escaping with the money or she just wanted it, I’m not sure. Either way, it doesn’t seem like her plans worked out.

I’m anxious to see what you have tangled together, m’dear!

I really enjoyed this start!

♥ Jami

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