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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
It ended so tensely! Eeeek can't wait for the next chapter!

I love how you show everyones perspective in third person, and how smoothly that runs. The thought process of James is always fascinating, and I love how detailed you make the chapters - e.g him thinking whether to tell Lily he forgot Jenna's name (that was very funny.) The whole Valentines dilemma was brilliant as well, and how clueless all of the males were!
I love how caring Lily is! It shows what a true gryffindor she is, because even though she's really creeped out by Arlek, she doesn't want to ruin James' moment. I think that showed true courage, and definitely added more eerie edginess to the story.
The way you compare Magonagall as a mother is so sweet, and made me feel quite moved actually. Because in a way, the Marauders, and Ron, Hermione and Harry are like the children she never had, and they looked up to her.
I can't believe James might be scouted! And Frank is an awesome commentator :) I think you wrote the game extraordinarily well, especially the litheness of Polly and the realistic action.
I also really like your characterisation of Moody; how he swears at the meeting, how he expresses his opinions and how he actually really cares about the order, and marauders.
I was laughing loads at Belle's reaction to Violet flirting with James. The comic delivery is classic, and the way you describe her facial expressions and tone of voice is very humourous. I found it hilarious!

Thank you for making my saturday again, Jami, and I look forward to the next instalment. This chapter's awesome! :D

Author's Response: Hi Sophie!!

I really enjoy getting to jump to the different sides of things. Getting to see the whole picture is something I always wished we'd gotten more of in the HP books, so I couldn't resist doing it for htis.

Males are so insanely clueless. Poor James is no exception, that's for sure, haha! Thank you so much for your comments about McGonagall. I can't imagine what she'd lost during this, and I agree with you on her feeling like they were sort of the children she'd never had. It's so sad to think of how many she'd lost ;(.

My brain does not think sports at all. Not even a tiny bit. So knowing that you think I wrote the parts of the game I included realistically means so much. It gives me the confidence I'm going to need to write the full game for the last of the season, haha.

Thank YOU for making my Saturday with this awesome review!! 99% of the time, when the chapter still isn't finished and it's already Friday, I go back to last weeks reviews and try and motivate myself. I'll definitely be doing that with yours!

Thank you so much ♥ Jami


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