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Review:patronus_charm says:
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I never really thought about what would happen to the Death Eaters after the battle, so it was really interesting to read this. I liked how you added emotion to Thanatus, and made him scared about what they would do to them, and whether his son was alright.

I liked how though you made him, you didn't make him regretful over what he did, because if that did come it would probably appear a few months later on. I liked how you added emotion to Yaxley too, as I never thought of him to be much of a human.

I really liked that scene with Andromeda, as I always thought Ted's death was really tragic, and her reaction to seeing him was perfect. Her emotions were really raw, and that was great considering that her daughter, and son-in-law had just died and now she was confronting her husband's killer.

I thought it was interesting that Theo and Astoria were fighting against the death eaters and Theo's father's reaction to it. I thought it made sense, and it showed how divisive war can be at times.

I spotted a minor typo/grammar thing here 'a great gash slicing through his young face.,' I think you meant to put a comma as the next word is in lowercase.

You have quite a few spacing issues in this chapter, with a lot of the paragraphs being indented significantly and quite a big gap in between each line. It did prove to be distracting at times so you may want to sort that out :) I would also suggest putting a page break in between the quote and the story so we have a better idea of what's part of the chapter.

Overall I thought that was a really interesting perspective, and I really enjoyed reading it :D

-Kiana!

Author's Response: Hi there!!

I'm glad you liked the different perspective and thought it was an original take. I tried to make the Death Eaters as round of character as possible while keeping them true to their wicked beliefs. I definitely agree that if there was regret and guilt, it would start a few months after the battle, and that at the moment they would just be angry and trying to save their own skins.

I'm glad you liked the scene with Andromeda as well!! I felt so sorry for her, and imagined her a bit like a vengeful Bellatrix, but who is angry out of love.

I'll do an edit to find that typo and fix the spacing-- I have such bad luck with formatting for some reason! :P Thanks for pointing that out. :)

Thank you for the great and long review, I really appreciate it!!! :)



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